Lucy Pevensie
Queen of Narnia
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Honorable Equine
Narnian Magic: 612
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Player's Gender: 
Character's Gender:  Affiliation: For Narnia!
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Misha |
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Human |
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Adjusting from being a celebrated 23 year old Narnian queen to being an ordinary 8 year old English schoolchild would be hard for anyone. Lucy did as well as anyone could. But she was rarely truly happy.
For a year, Lucy tried over and over to get back to Narnia, but to no avail. She did not give up hope, though, and now, at last, her faith seems to have borne fruit. She is back in Narnia, her true home, to restore Prince Caspian to his rightful throne. A daunting task? Maybe. But she's in Narnia; she can face anything. |
Posts: 716
Referrals: 2
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« Reply #0 on: June 09, 2008, 06:11:44 PM » |
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Hurray for another Telmarine!
Most of the things I saw here were spelling/grammar mistakes. A majority of these can be caught with a spell check. A few others you'll have to look more closely for, since the words are spelled incorrectly are the same as other words spelled correctly. For example, in "a little bit to trusting", "to" should be "too", and in "He tends to spend more time with his birds then people," "then" should be than."
Also, does Gavin use his falcons to go hunting (since that's what falconers typically do with their birds)? And why is Gavin reluctant to let Miraz use his falcons?
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CotM - Mar. 2010
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It was just a little fun, lighten up. (rubs his cheek) You're lucky you're a lady, else I'd have boxed your ears.
