Lucy Pevensie
Queen of Narnia
Administrator
Honorable Equine
Narnian Magic: 612
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Character's Gender:  Affiliation: For Narnia!
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Misha |
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Adjusting from being a celebrated 23 year old Narnian queen to being an ordinary 8 year old English schoolchild would be hard for anyone. Lucy did as well as anyone could. But she was rarely truly happy.
For a year, Lucy tried over and over to get back to Narnia, but to no avail. She did not give up hope, though, and now, at last, her faith seems to have borne fruit. She is back in Narnia, her true home, to restore Prince Caspian to his rightful throne. A daunting task? Maybe. But she's in Narnia; she can face anything. |
Posts: 716
Referrals: 2
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« Reply #0 on: April 25, 2008, 10:59:22 PM » |
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Hello there, and welcome!
This is a great application; I love the detail. There are just a few things you should take a look at before this is accepted.
1. There are a few spelling mistakes. If you run this through a spell check, you should catch them.
2. You list "Taking trips to visit Narnia" as something Arina likes. Does she visit Narnia often? If so, why? As a noble, I assume she'd go to the Telmarine court, which brings me to the last point:
3. Why does Arina decide to go to Narnia when she flees the arranged marriage? More importantly, why does she ally with the Old Narnians?
Also, as a side note unrelated to your application, there are a few other noble Archenlanders around. You might want to take a look at their character profiles and see if any plot ideas come to mind.
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« Last Edit: April 25, 2008, 11:02:36 PM by Lucy Pevensie »
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CotM - Mar. 2010
Storyline
It was just a little fun, lighten up. (rubs his cheek) You're lucky you're a lady, else I'd have boxed your ears.
