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Prince Caspian

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Played by Cara

"Cara has managed to...create a character that is both mythical and life-like. Impulsive, moody, and yet kind and good-hearted, Caspian is just beginning to show the makings of a true leader."
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Last 15 Shouts:
April 11, 2010, 09:07:48 PM
*wanders in an away-from-them-wardly direction*
April 06, 2010, 07:38:36 PM
Irritations indeed... *growls and sits on the ground, holding her head*
April 04, 2010, 08:10:18 PM
Alright, let's avoid fighting among ourselves. Save those irritations for the battlefield.
April 02, 2010, 11:25:42 PM
*grabs at the throbbing ache in her head* You! This hasn't a thing to do with you unless you're about ready to hand over my weapon! *groans cause it REALLY hurt* You... *slouches against a tree*
April 02, 2010, 11:24:35 PM
Angry It was just a little fun, lighten up. (rubs his cheek) You're lucky you're a lady, else I'd have boxed your ears.
April 02, 2010, 11:23:03 PM
D:< (swats Arina upside the head)
April 02, 2010, 11:20:46 PM
I do believe I was well within my rights, making unfounded accusations! And I could have very well hit him with something else if some feathered maiden hadn't snatched away my bow!
April 02, 2010, 11:19:11 PM
>:/ That was completely uncalled for.
April 02, 2010, 11:18:42 PM
:O
April 02, 2010, 11:18:21 PM
*slaps the despicable de la Braose man*
April 02, 2010, 11:15:48 PM
XD
April 02, 2010, 11:12:38 PM
Young WHAT?! *please imagine a rather screechy voice as she thinks of a way to kill person*
April 02, 2010, 11:07:17 PM
Ahh, young love Grin
April 02, 2010, 10:26:40 PM
-grins-
April 02, 2010, 10:08:49 PM
*scowls and says through clenched teeth* I believe I disagree.
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Peepiceek
Second-in-commmand to Reepicheep.
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« on: November 07, 2009, 12:57:49 AM »

About You
Name: Peep or Peepiceek
Age: 17
How did you find us: Searching for a Narnia Role Play. (Google)
Rules Password: [Password Accepted ~Misha]

Character Basics
Full Name: Peepiceek
Alias(es)/Nickname(s): Talking Mouse, Peep, Peepi
Gender: Male
Age: Unknown
Species: Talking Mouse
Status/Title: Second-in-command to Reepicheep
of the talking mice of Narnia. Leader of the talking mice of Narnia
Affiliation: Narnia

Character Appearance
Hair/Fur/Feathers: Peepiceek has a light brown fur on the main part of his body, though beneath has a cream colored fur, close to a blond. His Fur is rather soft when he is clean, but when venturing around with the talking mice and cleaning isn't done so much as regularly, Peep had a rather rough coat.
Eyes: Brown
Overall:
Being a Mouse, Peep stands at around one foot when on his two hind legs. His movement is very swift and elegant, especially when it comes to combat, and striding. Having a rather large tail behind him, Peep ensures it to be safe due to the fact it was once removed from his body. If Peep is to be seen with drooped ears, it is clear to all those around him that he is on the sad side, though when his ears are completely erect, one comes to feel the aura off the mouse, feeling the happiness he has, pulsing through his little body.

Peep, unlike humans has fur covering his entire body, which appears in a brown all over with the underneath being lighter in color - appearing as a creamy / white. Being a little bit more well-built then his leader Reepicheep, Peep's body shape is more masculine and bulky, rather than completely slender and skinny. His facial features are clear in the portrayal of his species, having a rather long snout and eyes parted on either side of his head. His whiskers erect from the side of either cheek, appearing to shine in the sunlight.

To keep himself from looking like any of the other Mice in his 'army' so to speak, Peep wears an ear ring in his left ear and a white short sleeve top, accompanied by a purple vest and olive/green cape. His feet are bandaged to ensure more balance and easier landing when he needs it. His waist has the same type of material used on his feet, to hold his clothing garments tight against him - preventing any flapping and so forth. His sheath hangs off the waist band, which holds his gold handled swords, much different to some of the other mice.

Portrayal:

(I'd Like him to be voiced by Antonio Banderas)

Character Personality
Likes:
- Aslan
- Combat training
- Fighting
- Protecting his People
- Having Leadership roles and qualities
Dislikes:
- Those Opposing Aslan
- Most Feline like Animals
- Anything that wants to eat him
- Up-Them-Selves-Royalty
- Selfishness
Strengths:
- Honor
- Swordsmanship
- Agility
- Friendships
- Allies
Weaknesses:
- Friends
- Mice (Family)
- Aslan
- Reepicheep
- Honor (He will never back down from a Challenge, Even if he can't win)

General Personality:
Being the Little Mouse that he is, he has something to prove - Hence the reason he never backs down from anything. Standing his ground no matter what it comes to, Peep is some one that his friends and family can trust to come to the rescue. If some one is in danger, Peep would put his life on the line just to save them, mainly due to the fact of how selfless he truly is. Honoring anything that Aslan wishes of him, Peep is loyal to the cause that he serves, never to let any one in service to the Narnian's down.

Having been in service to some one who has been striving to become a Knight and serve Aslan, Peep's dream is much the same - hence the reason that Reep and Peep get along so well. Fearing for the safety of his Oh-So-Amazing tail after the incident that occurred once when he was in battle, Peep will never let his tail out of sight whilst in battle, nervous and scared to loose it - again. An insult coming from another mouse isn't something that Peep takes so much as lightly, let alone from something ten times his size. Not being the biggest of jokers, Peep will never understand what some one means when they imply that they were merely, Joking. For this reason, and the lack of humor that Peep possesses, he will slay any one that insults any of his Mice friends and family or him.

Being smart and Agile, make Peep a very valuable ally - his quick thinking and quick moving get him out of a lot of harmful situations, Including those which are deadly. Being as smart as he is, proves to show that Peep is some one you will want by your side whilst discussing battle strategies or plans, as well as if you need help and technique with sword-play. Keeping Loyal to his own beliefs, no words could budge Peep hence the reason why he is a force not to be reckoned with.

Character History
Family: Way too many.

General History:
Peep was raised in a typical Mouse household with many siblings. He was usually rather lay back in his child-hood apart from of course being taught how to fight. In doing so he mastered several hundred techniques over time, including some forms of 'Paw to Paw' Combat. In doing so even from a young age he was some one that was feared, mainly due to the fact of how well he had managed to master all the styles that he knew. Despite fighting at a young age, he was educated about Aslan hence the reason why he stands so strong for his cause. He was not only taught that, but also taught to follow no ones words in life, no matter how negative people/mice were to him, not to listen and to continue on his way to what he wanted to be or become.

Wanting to be in service to Aslan, Peep went out when he found that another Mouse, one of just as much skill as he was in search of Mice to help the cause.
He decided to completely pledge his service to Reep (the Mouse who was in search of others committed to Aslans cause) and extremely soon became the Second in Command of the Talking Mice, helping to restore peace and save Narnia from the Telmarine. His skill with a place and knowledge of battle was easily welcomed by all those who were in the army, including Reep, hence the reason he was so kindly welcomed to fight along side his fellow friends, family and other mice.

When finally finding more Narnians, Peep was over joined, just as much as all others in the army of talking Mice. He aided in the teaching's of many Old Narnians on how to use their swords. This was mainly due to the fact that none of them - at least the majority of them were not so much as skilled in combat with a blade - with exceptions. Even when things were hard, he kept his faith in Aslan and immediately pledged his loyalty to Caspian X when the time arose for him to do so, Much like his leader did.  Despite things being extremely irritating and hard at first glance, it appeared that Reep (Peep's friend and leader) accepted Caspian more quickly than most. This eventually proved to signal Peep to align himself, mainly due to the fact that if his leader could trust Caspian, so should the rest of the Mice.


Other/Notes: Nope

Sample
RP Sample:

Pitter pattering along the forest floor, Peep began moving quicker and quicker across the forest. He was making good time earlier, but now he was falling behind - after all, the humans were on horses and he was running along. Continuing onward, Peep was still a little behind the horse-men though he was keeping close enough not to loose their trail. They had been riding for days on end to get to the battle that was at hand, and Peep didn't plan on missing it. Despite the fact that he had to encourage some of the other Mice to keep at it, Peep was glad that they were more then on their way. It should be no more than three minutes before they arrive at their destination, something that was more than making Peep happy. They rounded the last corner and headed straight for a group of swords-man up ahead.

Throwing his body into the air and drawing his sword as he went, Peep cut across the slits in the soldiers armor, casting the men down to the floor immediately.
"And a-One, and a-Two, and a-three." he began counting as the men dropped with every slice of his sword. His Green cape flew in the wind as he was almost gliding through the air. Kicking the front flap of a soldiers helmet up, it left the mans face unprotected, giving Peep the opening to get a critical hit - which he did. These men that they had come to fight weren't doing all that well and they had been in service to those opposing Aslan. Turning around as he jumped onto the back of a Centaur, Peep watched as his Mice hacked away at the enemy- they were doing wonderfully.

"For Aslan!" he called out getting a 'Hoora' from all those in service to the cause. It was amazing how well all of the Narnian's were working together, Centaurs helping Mice, Mice helping men - it was a great sight for a leader to see - or at least one of the leaders to see. A smile brushed across Peep's face as he encouraged his mice to fight harder, before an arrow almost clipped him. Quickly turning around, he looked at the archer and narrowed his eyes, "You picked to shoot at me just because I'm SMALL!" he growled as he leaped from the Centaur's back, flying across the battle-field and slamming the hilt of his sword into the archers head, knocking him out cold.
"That's how we - Do It!" he grinned, taking pride in the fact that size meant nothing when it came to these mice.
« Last Edit: November 08, 2009, 03:58:11 PM by Peepiceek » Logged
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« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2009, 03:45:05 PM »

Hi there! This is pretty good! I just have a few questions/suggestions.

First, in a couple of places, you mention that Peepiceek has previously lost his tail.  How did this happen?  You don't mention anything about it in the history, and it seems like it would have been a pretty big event. Further, how did it grow back? Aslan hasn't been around in centuries, so he can't heal Peep's tail like he healed Reepicheep's tail after Prince Caspian.

Second, four of Peepiceek's "weaknesses" are Friends, Mice (Family), Aslan, and Reepicheep. How are these weaknesses?

Finally, it would be nice if you could go through this once more for spelling and grammar. You have a few typos and several run-ons and capitalization problems.

So just edit your app to address those issues, let me know when you're done, and I'll be glad to take another look at this app!

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